BR 2-09: The Incredible Present

This story was a strange story.
Lily Mack lived with her granny. Her parents weren’t like other parents. They bought a balloon and set off “We’ll be back for Lily’s birthday!” The next day was her birthday. She wanted a telescope. Her birthday came. She sat up in surprise. Granny put her presents in a different. There were many balloons and notes at banister. They were a clue. She looked for here and there. Granny sat in a room. 3 presents were there! A book from Aunty Alice, a basket of smell soap from Granny, a box of writing paper from cousin Jo. Then, the last present from parents was. It was incredible. It was a small bag with a label. Ask for anything you want! wrote there. “Crayons, please!” So, They appeared. Then, she wrote a bet – making robot, a space buddy and, witch’s kitten, an enormous hand and so on. But ask for six things. All things were not complete. At the end, she wrote “parents.” So, her parents came back! She was very happy:) Dad broke the spell. All strange things recovered. Her parents were at home. Her parents and her lived together. Her parents became inventors.
It was great for her. I want this present, too.

〔213words〕

BR 2-08: THE MONSTER GANG

I like the kind of this book. It was easy to read for me.
It was rainy day today. Ellie, Ben, Lee, Micky, Tas and Ruby were boring. All children gathered in Ellie’s room. They played their favorite things but they were free. Ellie suggested that she had a fantastic idea. It was a gang! They approved and drew their gang pictures and had each idea. The next morning, it was fine. Children changed each 6 monsters. All used in a tree house of Micky’s granddad. All clothes were very creative. A monster was hungry and prepared refreshments and drink. It distributed them to each monster. It found someone but one monster didn’t find. Who? Then, all people heard Ellie’s voice. 6 monsters have been already there. ????? She was with her dog, Goldie in downstairs. They went back in the tree house. So, a note left on the table….from Gang! One was a really gang!!!!!
This story seemed to be a dream. Children’s play were fun:)

〔167words〕

BR 2-07: Star Reporter

Steve’s actions were interesting!
Steve had to look for articles of newspaper. Joe was a friend of Steve. He told him that a new lady looks to come in this town. He began to look for her. He might find her in this town. He chased her. She went to CADO MALL, so he went there, too. He didn’t see around and only see her. Then she went to a fountain in a park. He went there, too and fell into the fountain. Next, she met animal. He went there, too and horses were in my way. After that she went to library, drunk something in other place, went to CADO STAR newspaper office. Then, he visited a writer. In fact, he was her grandfather. There was a tree in his house. A cat went up the tree and couldn’t step off. Steve climbed the tree and tried to help the cat. But he fell down the tree. “Newspaper Editor’s Son Gets wet – cat stays Dry!” showed in an article. They fell in love!
This was happy end.

〔178words〕

BR 2-06: THE RANSOM OF RED CHIEF

I couldn’t expect this ending of this book, so I like this one.
Bill and Saw came the town to give some money. When they arrived at this town, “THE RANSOM OF RED CHIEF. Town of Summit have a nice day!” wrote. They tool a boy away with them. A boy’s name was Johnny, a son of the rich. He didn’t fear them at all. He was a naughty boy! He did children’s play with them. He enjoyed the time. One of the two was so tired…then was frighten the boy. Another one decided to demand a ransom. He wrote a letter and demanded $ 1500 as ransom. Then he received an answer. The content was “Give us $ 200. If so, you can escape while we will angry our child.” They paid $ 200 to Mr. and Mrs. Ebenezer Dorset. Then they escaped. In the sign of town, “THE RANSOM OF RED CHIEF.　You are now leaving. Town of Summit have a nice day!”
This book was written in naughty. It was funny.

〔174words〕

BR 2-05: Give us the Money

I think these pictures are comical. The first impression was good for me.
Adam Gray saw a nice dream and woke up. Today is boring Monday at the bank, He doesn’t like his job and he likes Mr. Smith, his boss. But he doesn’t want to be late for work. Every day doesn’t change. He met Mrs.B on his way to the bank. She said, “Your horoscope for holiday.” And “do something different today.” He didn’t believe it. He always goes left, but go right. Suddenly, he witnessed she was robbed a bag. He helped her and ran away with her bag and a gun. It was a scene in a drama. At the same time, burglars broke into a bank. A man of burglars and Adam Gray bumped. Their bags changed. Each people ran away. An actress and Adam Gray stopped because she didn’t need his help. She said that there was no money in the rucksack and there was just newspaper. They decided having the wrong bag. These two bags were exchanged when they were crash. They chased the two. Adam and a lady got on a car quickly. She asked him to call a movie supervisor. The car stopped in vacant land because there was no petrol. Burglars took back their bag. A movie worker filmed the scene. Adam was late for his job! Everyone laughed. Ha Ha Ha ;b If he lost a job, don’t worry. He was able to become a bank robber!
I was so excited. I finished to read this book sooner.

〔259wirds〕

BR 2-04: SURVIVE!

This book is a book which I can choose ways.
Your name was Chris, and you were in a small plane. Then the engine made strange and the plane went down into one of the mountains on going across the Rocky mountain way. Next, you had to go to 20. You could choose the way which you like. You’ll find if you could survive by your choice. Your first choice will be “Your turn to the right or left.” There are some trees in your right and there is deep snow in your left. By the way, which choice do you do? If you turn to the right, you will……
You must go back. If you turn to the left, you must go to 15. In 25, you are safe because you land on the snow. Then I chose “You stay in the plane.” I go out and go down the mountain. I can take the coat, the banana, and the cigarette lighter. I light a fire in the trees and spend during a night. One my way to go the mountain in the morning, I find the tunnel and enter there. In the inner part, there is a big hole in the ground and an old rope in the hole. Here, I chose “You go down the rope.” So, I …
If I choose “you go back up the tunnel.”, I come to go into the rocky valley. Next, I walk down the mountain. For a while, I walk and see some strange fruit, I don7t eat the fruit because I seem to see the dangerous. Walking carefully onto the lake, the ice begins to move under your feet, so I go back and walk around the lake. Then I walk down the river and catch a fish. I can survive. It’s evening again. There’s a helicopter in the sky and I build a big fire, but I can’t see the helicopter soon. Next morning, I build another fire. So, I hear the helicopter again. It seems the smoke and lands on the snow. I am safe. I can survive.
We can choose many kinds of ways. It was very interesting! Could you survive? I could survive twice….

〔369words〕

Poems

Time Joyce Grenfell
When I was a girl there was always time,There was always time to spare.There was always time to sit in the sun;And we were never doneWith lazing and flirting,And doing our embroidery,And keeping up our memory books,And brushing our hair,And writing little notes,And going on picnics,And dancing, dancing, dancing, dancing--When I was a girl there was always time to waste.Thank the Lord.When I was a young woman there was always time,There was always time to spare.There was always time to walk in the sun,And we were never doneWith going to weddings,Our own and our friends',And going to parties,Away at weekends,And having our childrenAnd bringing them up,And talking, talking, talking, talking--When I was a young woman there was always time to enjoy things.Thank the Lord.And when I was an elderly woman there was no more time,There was no more time to spare.There was no more time to sit in the sun,For we were never doneWith answering the telephone,And looking at the TV,And doing baby-sitting,And talking to our friends,And shopping, shopping, shopping, shopping,And washing-up, washing-up, washing-up,Writing letters, writing lettersRushing, Rushing, rushing,And we were always hurried,And we were never bored.When I was an elderly womanThere was never time to think.Thank the Lord.But now I'm an old old woman,So I want the last word:There is no such thing as time--Only this very minuteAnd I'm in it.Thank the Lord.
〔275words〕

A Big Guest;)

December 18.
I had a part-time job. We had many reservations. A group of them was people of TKU and one of them was Araki, Chunichi Dragons baseball player. I didn't know the man but I was said to well-known announcer of TKU. I wish I had known the man more. I had a various experience.

〔58words〕

Poems

Clouds Gregory Djanikian
It was a test on clouds, Science I, Seventh grade, Mrs. Snyder, who, I remember, always wore dark colors. My fingers trembled, I couldn't keep A point on my pencil, and in the next row, John Carlson was getting all the answers. Cumulus, altostratus, cirrus. What was I dreaming of? Clouds. They reminded me of Iowa or Kansas, Or my notion of them, expanses of wheat, Big skies somewhere west of where I was, Somewhere with rural addresses, dogs Named "Blue" or "Jake," and railroad crossings, And a boy's river lazing through farm and pasture. Cirrus fibratus, cirrus uncinus, Altocumulus, cumulus congestus I was losing time, my answer sheet Was white as a cloud, and there was A scratching of pencils on paper. What was I after? Summer. A hillside. A cumulus sky driven by the breezes. Kites, and kite string humming in the air. Shouts, laughter, in the distance only. Cumulus humilis, cumulus fractus Time was up and we were let go And I reeled out to the playground lightened. There was the bluest sky and I saw Fibrous wisps converging into grey. "Cirrus spissatus," John Carlson announced From behind me, maybe to himself, And skipped away at ease with the world. All the way home, I spat out those names I'd learned one by one, cirrostratus nebulosus, Altocumulus undulatus, cirrocumulus, cumulonimbus, Until I was left with just "clouds," Something vague and inexact, but prevailing, Like some notion of happiness, Or longings without name.
I think it is wonderful feelings, ‘longings without name’.
〔257words〕

Portfolio for Writing IV, Section 1a

Student ID: 07168

Portfolio for Writing IV,
Section 1a

(See: Note 1, below)

0.0. Overview

Reviews, Posts, Words, and More

(See: Note 2, below.)

1.0. Essays

(See: Note 3, below.)

Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).

1.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates yy.mm.dd	¶	W	C	L	P	M
Website review 08.09.29 (375+ words)	Cooks Recipes Parfait Dessert Recipes: rereview	08.09.29	5	437	5	8	1	0
Favorite place(-s) 08.10.20 (450+ words)	Essay 2-02: I lov Takema ~ Favorite Place	08.10.19	3	454	0	0	2	0
Mrs. Doubtfire 08.11.04 (500+ words)	MR 2-01: Mrs. Doubtfire is funny	08.11.02	6	502	5	1	1	1
Community life 08.11.17 (default length*)	Essay 2-04; My Delightful Community Life	08.11.17	6	511	0	0	0	0
Kumamoto's best-kept secrets 08.12.01 (5+ ¶¶)	Essay 2-05; My Happy Place	08.11.30	3	286	0	1	1	0
Learning with computers 2008.12.15 (6+ ¶¶)	Essay 2-06; Our Computer Society	08.12.15	6	559	0	0	0	0
Totals	---	---	29	2749	10	10	5	1

Key:

¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length

W: number of words

C: number of comments

L: number of links

P: number of photos or other graphics
M: number of other media included in post
*: "long enough to cover the ... [communities] you choose," Writing Studio Blog, Preparation for Next Essays, 2008.10.29)

1.2. Best Essay

Selection and Assessment: Which of those six assigned essays do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• 
  
  

  I chose the 4th essay "My Delightful Community Life". I have two reasons. First, I could write the points of each paragraphs. Second, I could write easy to read and understand my essay. I wanted everyone to know myself.

2.0. Comments

Showcase	Titles of posts with links	Dates of comments yy.mm.dd	Numbers of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog*	--	--	--	--
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog*	ES2-03:Mrs.Doubtfire	08.11.05	32	I wrote the point that she should improve.
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog*	Cooks Recipes Parfait Dessert Recipes: rereview	08.10.01	71	She wrote the good points.
2.4. Most comments on:	Titles of posts with link	Dates of posts yy.mm.dd	Total number of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.4.1. Any one of your essays*	Essay 2-04; My Delightful Community Life	08.11.12	47	She wrote good and bad points.
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	08.11.15	---	---
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	32	I respond I should improve the bad point.
2.4.2. Any of your other posts*	Part - Time Job & Mac	08.08.14	25	She answered my blog about her and me.
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	08.08.17	---	---
2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	21	I wrote my feelings.

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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes them good comments.

2.5. Recent comments display

Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a

• I disply recent comments under a clock of the top.

2.6. Additional reflections on comments

• I was very happy when I gave many comments from my friends.



• I wrote things that one should improve in comments.

3.0. Book Reviews

3.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates (yy.mm.dd)	Words	Comments
Example:	Vampire Killer	07.05.16	39	1
2-01	BR 2-01: VAMPIRE KILLER	08.09.06	193	0
2-02	BR 2-02: KING AUTHUR	08.10.07	198	0
2-03	BR2-03: TAXI OF TERROR	08.10.17	295	0
2-04	BR 2-04: SURVIVE!	08.12.30	369	0
2-05	BR 2-05: Give us the Money	08.12.30	257	0
2-06	BR 2-06: THE RANSOM OF RED CHIEF	08.12.30	174	0
2-07	BR 2-07: Star Reporter	08.12.30	178	0
2-08	BR 2-08: THE MONSTER GANG	08.12.30	167	0
2-09	BR 2-09: The Incredible Present	08.12.30	213	0
2-10	BR 2-10: Pinocchio	09.01.30	421	0
2-11	BR 2-11: MY FATHER'S DRGON	09.01.30	107	0
2-12	BR 2-12: THE STORY OF BABAR	09.01.30	152	0
2-13	BR 2-13: 10 trick - or - Treaters	09.01.30	96	0
2-14	BR 2-14: Penelope at School	09.01.30	81	0
2-15	BR 2-15: BUSY, BUSY TOWN	09.01.30	96	0
2-16	BR 2-16: ALICE ADVENTURE IN WONDERLAND	09.01.30	123	0
2-17	BR 2-17: GIVE US THIS DAY	09.01.30	89	0
2-18	BR 2-18: FIVE Little MONKEYS	09.01.30	108	0
---	---	Totals:

Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).

3.2. Best Book Review

Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• I chose BR 2-04: SURVIVE! I could write my thinking and this story. I'm sure that you come to read this book.

4.0. Blog Layout, Labeling, Linking, & Media

Showcase	Yes	No
4.1. Does your blog display an archive?	○
4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts?	○
4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month?	○
4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar?	○
4.2. Does your blog have labels displayed in sidebar?	○
5.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately):	---	---
"books" (plural) AND "reviews" (plural)	○
"essays" (plural) AND "portfolios" (plural, without "proto-")	○
"quickposts" (plural, with no space between quick and posts)	○
"links" (plural) AND "media" (plural)	○
"movies" (plural) AND "websites" (plural)	○
"brainstorms" (or "brainstorming"), "essay prep.," AND "free-writing" (or "free-writes")	○
4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels?	○
How many other labels have you attached to three (3) or more posts? __39_ other labels attached to three or more posts	---	---
Which labels, and to how many posts each? Please list those labels instead of www, xxx, yyy..., and list numbers of posts instead of n, m, o... (in parentheses), below. airplane (1) Amimals (4) books (13) brainstorms (1) Computers (5) cooking (2) Drink (4) English (19) Essays (17) essay¶prep. (2) Events (29) Family (20) Files (3) free-writing (1) Friends (46) Houses (6) Kumamoto (11) Lacrosse (37) links (7) Love (6) Lunch (2) Machines (11) movies (13) Music (13) My life (11) New (12) Night (8) Outline (5) part-time job (12) photos (24) portfolios (3) quickposts (44) recipes (3) Rests (20) reviews (15) Self-intro (11) Shopping (10) Sports (16) Summer (8) Support (3) Tests (4) Trips (19) Typing (13) vehicle (6) websites (4)	---	---
4.3. Links & media	---	---
4.3.1. Does your blog include photos or other graphics?	○
Does your blog profile include a photo or graphic representation?	○
How many of your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? 47___ posts including photos or other graphics	---	---
4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links?	○
How many of your posts this semester include three (3) or more links? _0__ posts including three or more links (including this portfolio!)	---	---
4.3.3. Does your blog include other media?	○
How many of your blog posts this semester include other media? 2___ posts including other media	---	---
What kind(-s) of media have you included in posts this semester? Please list the kinds here: movie ...	---	---
What media content that you originally produced, if any, do your blog posts for this semester contain? Please list and explain each item briefly, and add short links and dates (yy.mm.dd) for reference. ... (short link, date) ... (short link, date) ... (short link, date)	---	---

4.4. Overall presentation

What have you done to enhance the overall presentation of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.

1. I had to emphasis the points that I wanted everyone to know.



2. I had to change the size of words and the color.



3. I had to write the enough length sentences.

5.0. Additional reflections on your blog and your writing on it

Please feel free to include reflections on both spring and fall semester work, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, and reflections).

• It was hard for me to write proto-portfolios.



• I enjoyed making my blog but I had to make my time to do it.



• I had to post many posts more.
  

6.0. Advice and suggestions for yourself, your peers, and your successors

• You should write blog every day.



• Please write your favorite things or brief things.



• Please use your pictures and links.
  

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3. The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derives from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
   

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Poems

The Snow Man Louis Mac Neice
His memory was shaped by forgetting Into a snowman, handful by handful;In the end two pebbles for eyes and a cherry wood Pipe clamped in the thin lipped mouth. But was this fellow really his past,This white dummy in a white waste?While the censor works, while the frost holds,Perhaps he will pass--but then he will pass. Yesterday was a dance of flakes Waltzing down, around, and up,But today is lull and smudge, today Is a man with a pipe that will not draw. Today is a legless day with head-on Idiot eyes, a stranded deaf Mute in a muted world. This lump Is what he remembered when he forgot, Already beginning to dribble. Tomorrow Comes the complete forgetting, the thaw.Or is it rather a dance of water To replace, relive, that dance of white?

To forget my memories, and that is existence of snow man. Then the existence of human.

〔160words〕

Learning with Computers: Outline

1. Definition

• Information on computers

2. Many things that we can exploit

• Internet
• Research
• Websites

3. Purpose

• To get new information, interested information, information which we want to know

4. Points

• Good points
• Bad points

5. Goal

• To come to use computers easily
• To be able to use computers with suiting purposes
  

6. Conclusion

〔66words〕

Free - writing: Learning with computers

We can learn many things with computers. One of these is Internet. We watch websites, research much information, listen to music, watch movies make communications with many people. Then, we can do these rapidly and research easily. First, we can watch websites which we like, are interested in, want to know and are payed attention to people. Second, we can research much information which we must know and communicate much information which we must tell them. Third, we can enjoy ourselves by listening to music, watching movies and making communications. We must use computer in society life, so we must be able to use it.
〔105words〕

Learning with Computers

Learning with Computers

Challenges

1. Difficulty

• Computer functions
  

---Variety
---Complexity
2. Preventing physical strain
Communication

1. Community
2. English
   

• Vocabulary
  

---Power words
Useful applications

1. Computer applications

• Power words
• Word
• Excel
• Typing programs
  

2. Web applications

• Blogs
• Facebook
• Typing practice tools
  
• Audio/Video

---Skype
-Voice chat
-Video-conferencing
---Video-production
Internet

• Reserch
• Internet
• Websites
  

Other

• Music

〔50words〕

Brainstorming: Learning with computers

1. Words

• wrting words

2. Excel

• making graphics
  

3. Internet

• reserching information
• Music
• Vocabulary - Power words
• Blogs
• Pictures

〔15words〕

Poems

Delight in Disorder Robert Herrick
A sweet disorder in the dress Kindles in clothes a wantonness : A lawn about the shoulders thrown Into a fine distraction :An erring lace which here and there Enthrals the crimson stomacher : A cuff neglectful, and thereby Ribbons to flow confusedly : A winning wave (deserving note) In the tempestuous petticoat :A careless shoe-string, in whose tieI see a wild civility :Do more bewitch me than when art Is too precise in every part.
〔85words〕